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Title: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 29, 2012, 01:57:04 AM

I began a project a while back where I would rewrite the scripts of various games that were on the first PlayStation. The first among them was our beloved Castlevania: Symphony of the Night. So this is all I have so far. Let me know what you think! :D

NOTE: These are written in a canonical order. No alternate path stuff will be written in.

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(upon resting in a cursed coffin, Alucard has a nightmare. He awakens in a familiar village. Recognizing the scene, Alucard begins running through the village in horror, and sees his mother hanging from a cross, surrounded by several angered townspeople. Time freezes for them as Alucard screams out)

Alucard
MOTHER!

(everything becomes silent. The humans move no longer. Lisa's head slowly rises to see her son, staring in horror at her. A weak smile forms on her face)

Lisa Farenheights
It is good to hear your voice again, my son...
How I've missed you...

Alucard
Just wait there, mother!
I'll save you!

(in his attempt to reach Lisa, a flame bursts from the ground, blocking Alucard's path. Hopelessly, he looks at her)

Lisa Farenheights
Don't trouble yourself, Adrian.
It's far too late for me.
Nothing can be done any longer.

Alucard
What? No!
No, there must be something I can do!

Lisa Farenheights
It's all right.
If I can protect others, then I regret nothing with my passing.

(tears begin to stream down Alucard's face)

Alucard
No, no, not again!
I won't lose you again, mother!
I can't lose you again!

(realizing there is nothing he can do, Alucard falls to his knees and begins pounding the ground with his fists, and begins to scream out. Uncontrollable sadness fills him as he once again must watch his mother die)

Lisa Farenheights
Please...
All I ask of you is that you listen to me... in my final moments...

(Alucard sits there on his knees, breathing heavily. He looks up to her with his tear-stained face)

Alucard
...Yes, mother...

Lisa Farenheights
Look around you, Adrian.
These humans... what a miserable lot they are.
They deserve naught but death. By no hand but your own.

(Alucard's eyes widen, and he knows something is wrong)

Alucard
What?

Lisa Farenheights
Slaughter them all, just as your father would have.
Better to kill them now than for them to suffer at the hands of their own sins!
Begin by avenging me, Adrian.
These men you see before me brought me to my death.
Start with them. Kill them.

(Alucard's head drops, and he grabs his head)

Alucard
No...
It wasn't... It wasn't like this...

Lisa Farenheights
Adrian? What is the matter?

Alucard
These can't be the words of my mother...

Lisa Farenheights
Adrian, do not stall!
They may elude your blade!
Kill them, Adrian! Kill them all!

(Alucard climbs to his feet and looks directly at Lisa)

Alucard
No! I understand now!
You are not my Mother!
What trickery is this?! What kind of demon are you?!

(there is a flash of light, and Lisa no longer hangs from the cross. Rather, a Succubus stands before Alucard, and chuckles)

Succubus
You broke free of the spell, interesting...
But I suppose it was an easy task for you.

Alucard
(draws sword)
You monster. You play with memories you could never understand.
Death would be too lenient a punishment for you.

Succubus
(laughs)
Then give it to me, little boy. Don't be shy.

(upon defeating the Succubus, she falls to the ground. She looks up at Alucard, who has nothing but hatred on his face)

Succubus
The sheer power you have...
It is much more than he predicted...

Alucard does not respond

Succubus
That strength... that beauty...
You are the very image of your father, boy...
He would be proud.

Alucard
Death in the dream world will set your soul wandering for eternity.
Rest in peace, demon.

(the screen fades to white, as the Succubus screams out for mercy)

Succubus
Wait! I beg of you! Please!

(she screams as the screen fades to black)

(click to show/hide)

(Alucard enters the throne room, and finds Richter sitting on the throne, with a glass of wine in his hand. He grins madly at Alucard before speaking)

Richter Belmont
I've been waiting for you.

Alucard
Belmont... I have to know.
Why are you doing this?
What do you hope to gain with the resurrection of Count Dracula?

Richter Belmont
You know how it works, do you not?
Every one hundred years, he rises... and my House destroys him.
But what happens next?
Don't you see? With his death, my role is over.
I will not be discarded like some dog!
I will revive him... and the battle will last for eternity!

Alucard
...I see.
You think your path merely one of war, then?
You have been blinded, vampire hunter.

Richter Belmont
...Blind, am I?

(Richter drinks from his wine glass and throws it aside to the ground, where it shatters. He stands and walks down the steps from the throne, grabbing his whip from his belt)

Richter Belmont
Then show me the truth in your claims.
Show me what you're made of!

(Richter then activates Grand Cross, and the battle begins. However, Alucard destroys the mysterious green orb that had been lingering in Richter's presence. He grabs his head and falls to his knees with an anguished scream, and a specter rises from his body. Dressed completely in a purple robe, the specter smirks. It is the ghost of the Dark Priest Shaft)

Shaft
You saw through my scheme... how inconvenient.
But it seems I've stalled enough... Yes...
The resurrection of Count Dracula is at hand!

(With a laugh, Shaft vanishes, and the dark clouds in the sky outside the castle part... and from them, comes a replica of Castle Dracula. Richter and Alucard both stare out a stained glass window at the monstrosity that has come from the skies. Richter looks down at his own two hands in horror)

Richter Belmont
Oh my God... is this... my doing..?
No... What have I done?!

(Richter grabs his head in shame. At this moment, Maria runs into the throne room and stands beside Alucard)

Maria Renard
Richter!

(Richter takes his hands away from his head, and looks up at Maria)

Richter Belmont
M... Maria?

(Maria turns to Alucard, with a smile on her face)

Maria Renard
Alucard... you saved him.
How can I ever thank you?

(Richter slowly climbs to his feet, and looks, stunned, at the man who had just bested him in combat)

Richter Belmont
A... Alucard?
You couldn't be... the Alucard?
That isn't possible... you stood beside my ancestor...
That was over three hundred years ago!

(Alucard shakes his head)

Alucard
Worry not about that.
There are more pressing matters at hand.
That man who had control over you, is he in that castle?

Richter Belmont
...Yes, I think so.
Shaft... after all this time, that bastard's ghost still haunts me...

Alucard
Then it's decided.
Richter, Maria. Both of you, leave this place at once.
I will go alone into the depths of hell and finish this...
Once and for all.

Maria Renard
...Okay. Alucard, please. Be careful.

(Alucard nods reassuringly to Maria, before setting off to the other side of the throne room. Climbing the stairs into a teleporter, Alucard sends himself through a beam of light into the inverted castle in the sky...)

(click to show/hide)

You can find the final three scenes here! (http://castlevaniadungeon.net/forums/index.php/topic,5602.msg151608.html#msg151608)

I had a ton of fun writing it, and I'd like to know what you all think.

It was written, taking reference mostly from the DXC version, as well as the ending to Rondo. Some influence came from Legacy of Kain. Enjoy. ;)

Title: Re: PSone Rewrites #1 - Castlevania: Symphony of the Night (preview)
Post by: Chernabogue on December 29, 2012, 02:19:51 AM

Really nice! Good job! :)

Title: Re: PSone Rewrites #1 - Castlevania: Symphony of the Night (preview)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 29, 2012, 06:08:10 AM

Decided to include a second preview up above. Which is much shorter than the preview before it.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Preview)
Post by: X on December 29, 2012, 09:10:14 PM

It does give out a fuller conversation between them, doesn't it. Can you write up more? :)

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Preview)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 29, 2012, 09:16:26 PM

Quote from: X on December 29, 2012, 09:10:14 PM

It does give out a fuller conversation between them, doesn't it. Can you write up more? :)

I already have up to the Nightmare sequence written. I'm gonna release them all together whence finished. :)

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Preview)
Post by: Phoenix7786 on December 29, 2012, 11:02:12 PM

SHUT UP AND TAKE MY MONEY!

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Preview)
Post by: X on December 30, 2012, 01:02:36 AM

Hey, he's willing to pay. Do as he says.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 30, 2012, 09:12:23 AM

Alrighty. I posted all that I have so far. :D

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: X on December 30, 2012, 11:48:35 AM

For the succubus I feel her DXC line should've been kept.

"Then give it to me little man. Don't be shy..."

Saying something like this is far more of their nature as they are sexually driven.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 30, 2012, 04:11:48 PM

Quote from: X on December 30, 2012, 11:48:35 AM

For the succubus I feel her DXC line should've been kept.

"Then give it to me little man. Don't be shy..."

Saying something like this is far more of their nature as they are sexually driven.

Hmm... I think I will keep that one.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: darkmanx_429 on December 02, 2013, 06:03:00 PM

Could you rewrite some dialogue from Simon's Quest?

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 02, 2013, 06:21:31 PM

I'd definitely be willing to. There's just not a lot to go off of outside of short phrases to really give me inspiration. Symphony of the Night was mostly easy because I had the original script, the DXC script, and Gemini's translation to use as reference. But I think with enough planning I could potentially build a full-length script for Simon's Quest (at least, as far as full-length goes in CV).

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Corpsecrank on December 02, 2013, 09:16:22 PM

I always felt like the dialogue in the game should fit the time period. For this reason I can only picture that in my mind and this feels a bit to modern for me. Really well written though mind you.

The problem with actually using periodically correct english is that you and I would be unable to read it and understand what is being said. Sure we could get the basic idea but it would be difficult and parts could be entirely misinterpreted.

There are also a lot of transitions in the english language around the 15, 16, and 17 hundreds. Going from old english to middle english and then early modern english. That can complicate things any time the story crosses one of the transition boundaries if it happens to take place during one.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: X on December 03, 2013, 10:28:24 AM

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I always felt like the dialogue in the game should fit the time period. For this reason I can only picture that in my mind and this feels a bit to modern for me. Really well written though mind you.

The problem with actually using periodically correct english is that you and I would be unable to read it and understand what is being said. Sure we could get the basic idea but it would be difficult and parts could be entirely misinterpreted.

There are also a lot of transitions in the english language around the 15, 16, and 17 hundreds. Going from old english to middle english and then early modern english. That can complicate things any time the story crosses one of the transition boundaries if it happens to take place during one.

This is a really good point. Since SotN is in 1797 you should get a hold of some late 18th century literature for refrence. This will help you to get to know the English language of that time period. Ironically enough if you've played CoD then you should also use its cut-scenes as a reference too. The script that the voice actors read does a good job of portraying an older form of English speaking then what's normally heard today.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 03, 2013, 07:01:55 PM

I'm not entirely trying to fit it in with the time period's speech, but more or less trying to expand upon the dialog and make it more interesting to read. As well, I don't have a whole lot of time to study speech patterns (though CoD is definitely a good place to refer to, as those cutscenes are quite a treat). I think I'll finish up this one as is, and then do some studying for a next one I plan on rewriting (stuck between Legacy of Darkness and Aria of Sorrow for what I want to do next. The latter doesn't really require much in the way of studying, though).

EDIT: And like Corpsecrank has mentioned, it may be hard to read and understand entirely the periodically correct English. If I'm not mistaken, Legacy of Kain uses such English, doesn't it? The dialog in that is extremely complex, and while it was a reference I used, it was only as far as dialog length.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Corpsecrank on December 04, 2013, 12:54:44 PM

Yeah I think you have the right idea anyhow. I mean trying to make the dialogue periodically correct is impossible in some ways. However a reference to it by maybe using bits and pieces to give a more authentic feeling could work quite well. Leaving out words used only in very modern forms of english where possible could help this as well.

I like the idea you are working on here. I may have always pictured the sotn dialogue as something that should be periodically correct to a degree but the other big thing I always had in my mind after playing was the lack of dialogue in general in the game. Expanding upon the dialogue really does add so much more depth to the plot even if no new details are actually added. Interesting stuff to say the least really.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 04, 2013, 06:31:46 PM

Thank you very much sir. Maybe soon I'll find some inspiration to finish this already. I've been too buried in my work on my original stories.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 08, 2013, 08:00:01 PM

Updated. Added two more scenes. Gonna work on the battle against Richter and the inverted castle stuff tomorrow.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: X on December 09, 2013, 10:12:32 AM

Great job! Did you restore the Succubus' raunchy lines? After all she is a succubus and they are sexually driven no-matter the situation.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Corpsecrank on December 09, 2013, 12:16:25 PM

Listen to this guy hes fapping to text now :)

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 09, 2013, 12:49:12 PM

Quote from: X on December 09, 2013, 10:12:32 AM

Great job! Did you restore the Succubus' raunchy lines? After all she is a succubus and they are sexually driven no-matter the situation.

Yes, I re-added the DXC line. As for the rest of the script, I kept it the way it was. I decided to not include the fight between Alucard and Maria since... it doesn't really make sense.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (Unfinished)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 11, 2013, 07:33:27 PM

And with that, I am pretty much finished with this rewrite! Unfortunately, due to a max character count on posts, I cannot include the last few scenes in the first post, so they'll be right here!

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(Dropping into the room in a crouch, Alucard slowly lifts his head to see the specter of Shaft, standing there, facing toward the altar. As Alucard rises to his feet, Shaft claps his hands)

Shaft
All hail the son of our Master!
Stronger than the mightiest hunter!

Alucard
Shaft, wasn't it?
So you were the one controlling Belmont.

(Shaft slowly turns around to face Alucard)

Shaft
Yes. I am the one who brought about the resurrection of your father five years ago.
That was, until Belmont and his doll came forth and ruined my plans...
But all has not yet been lost.
This world must be cleansed in a forge of Chaos.

Alucard
Loyal to a fault, it seems.
Tell me, why did you make Belmont the lord of the castle?

Shaft
(chuckles
Is it not obvious?
For many centuries, Castle Dracula has been a battleground.
Light and darkness have confronted in a deathmatch here, and never to cease.
But the so-called "light" the vampire hunters wield... it always prevails.
So what better way to rid myself of a pesky problem... than to have them fight each other?

Alucard
And you would have the strongest among them eliminate the rest.
Belmont.

Shaft
Exactly.
And by possessing him, and turning him into the castle's master...
He was no longer a threat.
The whole conflict between the fool and those vermin was merely a stall.

Alucard
But your plan has a fatal flaw.
You never counted for me.
And now, it has failed.

Shaft
(laughs)
Oh? Has it indeed?
Foolish child. Your soul is just as frail as his was.
You will become my puppet. You will take his place!
I will tear that weak human spirit apart!

(The two fight, but Alucard prevails. The orb protecting Shaft shatters, and he crumples to the ground with a cry of pain. Face down on the ground, slowly, he begins crawling toward the altar)

Shaft
N... no...

Alucard
Your beloved darkness awaits you.
Dwell there for all eternity.

(Shaft chuckles weakly. He then laughs madly, continuing to crawl toward the altar)

Shaft
I have... fulfilled my role...
The Master has come... he will purify this corrupt world...
Let him purge this world... in flames...

(Shaft reaches out toward the large symbol on the wall, before dropping, his hand falling upon the steps to the altar. Just as he does so, the room begins to shake, and the eye on the symbol opens. Darkness begins to fill the room, until Alucard is lost within the blackness)

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(Alucard runs toward Dracula and drives his sword through Dracula's heart. Dracula screams out in pain)

Alucard
Go back whence you came!
Trouble the soul of my Mother no more!

(Alucard pulls the sword away, and Dracula falls to his knees, blood spilling from his wound. He grips his chest, defeated. He breathes heavily, in agony)

Count Dracula
Impossible... how...
How can this be...
How is it that I have been so defeated..?

(Alucard sheathes his sword, and kneels down before his father)

Alucard
You lost your heart, your soul.
You became blinded with vengeance, and that was your undoing.

(Dracula weakly chuckles at his son. He looks at him, with a weak smile on his face)

Count Dracula
How poetic...
So... I tragically sacrificed all I held dear... in this mad quest for power...
"For what profit is it to a man if he gains the whole world...
but loses his own soul..."
Matthew 16:26...

Alucard
Father... even after all of this...
I know that Mother will find it in her heart to forgive you.

Count Dracula
Forgive me..? No... I understand now.

(Dracula drops his head)

Leon... it has taken me so long, but I finally understand...
This is not the path I should have taken...

(Dracula once more looks at Alucard)

My son... please, tell me...
What... what were Lisa's last words?

Alucard
...She said, "Do not hate humans.
And if you cannot live with them, then at least do them no harm.
For their's is already a hard lot."
And... she also said that she would love you.
For eternity.

Count Dracula
I see...

(Dracula looks toward the sky)

Lisa...
I can never atone for what I have done...
I... I am sorry...

(Dracula faces Alucard once more, and with a warm smile on his face)

My son... Adrian...
It is good to look upon your face again.
...Farewell.

(Slowly, Dracula fades away. Alucard slowly climbs to his feet as he watches the final embers of his father fade into obscurity. Slowly, a tear falls from his eye onto the ground as he speaks his final words to his father)

Alucard
...Farewell, Father.
Believe it or not... I will miss you.

(Alucard fades away into the blackness as well. Slowly, the castle in the sky vanishes, and we see on a cliffside Richter and Maria, as they watch Castle Dracula once more crumble to the ground. The sun shines upon its remains. They hear footsteps behind them, and turn around to find Alucard standing there)

Alucard
So you made it.

Maria Renard
Alucard!
I'm so glad you're all right!

Richter Belmont
It's over, huh...
Forgive me. It's my fault you had to fight your own father.
If only I were not so weak, none of this would have happened.

Alucard
Worry not.
I had my own reasons for facing him.
You are not to blame.

Richter Belmont
Even so, it couldn't have been easy.

Alucard
Indeed it wasn't... but it had to be done.
There was no avoiding it.
And remember, the only thing necessary for evil to triumph is for good men to do nothing.

Richter Belmont
I understand.

(The three of them stand together, looking upon the ruins of Castle Dracula.)

Maria Renard
It's over... things can finally go back to normal.
Alucard, where will you go from here?

Alucard
...The blood that flows in my veins is cursed.
It holds naught but ill fortune for this world.
I suppose it would be best for this world if I were to once again disappear.

Maria Renard
Disappear..? B-but...

(Alucard looks on toward the ruins of the castle. He still once more feels remorse)

Alucard
...I must bid farewell to my homeland once more, never to look upon its beauty again...
And to you two, as well.
Take care of yourselves.
I'm afraid we will not meet again.

(Alucard turns away from them, and begins walking away. Maria steps forward, wanting to say something, but nothing meaningful comes out)

Maria Renard
(quietly)
...Alucard...

(Richter stands beside her and places a hand on her shoulder)

Richter Belmont
What are you waiting for?
I know you want to go after him.

(Maria looks to Alucard leaving, then to Richter)

Maria Renard
I... I'm sorry.
But... I just can't let him vanish like this.
I have to at least try and talk to him...

Richter Belmont
Then don't waste any more time, Maria.
Hurry after him.
If there's anyone who can ease his pain, it's you.

Maria Renard
(nods)
Thank you, Richter.
Farewell.

Richter Belmont
And yourself, Maria.

(Maria turns away and begins running after Alucard, and slowly the screen fades, and the credits begin to roll)

~The End~

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: Corpsecrank on December 11, 2013, 09:24:00 PM

Nice! I wonder if there is a way to get the first post fixed from someone who could modify it without a limit. Could also copy it all into a txt file for download or something and add that the first post.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: VladCT on December 11, 2013, 09:45:34 PM

Quote from: Claimh Solais on December 11, 2013, 07:33:27 PM

So what better way to rid myself of a pesky problem... then to have them fight each other?

Is that a typo I see?

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: X on December 12, 2013, 10:38:11 AM

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Yes. I am the one who brought about the resurrection of your father four years ago.
That was, until Belmont and his doll came forth and ruined my plans...
But all has not yet been lost.
This world must be cleansed in a forge of Chaos.

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI :)

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: Corpsecrank on December 12, 2013, 12:34:41 PM

Quote from: X on December 12, 2013, 10:38:11 AM

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI :)

Damn you now I have to go look this up because I could have sworn I read or heard right in the official material it was 4 years. If I am right does that mean they made a mistake in the official material? Hmmm time to go find out.

Found it:

Shaft would continue to exist as a spirit contained within a crystal ball. However, in the five years since the previous battle, Shaft manages to regain power through the curse placed on Richter. After four years, Shaft succeeds in gaining full control over Richter. He plans to revive Dracula with the aid of Richter's powers. Maria sets out to find the missing Richter only to stumble on Dracula's castle which had risen out of the mist. Sensing the rise of evil, Alucard awakes from a 300 year slumber. Thanks to Alucard, Richter is freed from Shaft's influence. Unable to influence Richter further but with enough power to act on his own, Shaft summons Dracula's true castle as an inverted floating version in the sky above the current castle.

That doesn't sound very clear when you first read it but I believe what this means is that yes it is 5 years later but during the 4th year richter had fallen under complete control. So shaft spent the last 5 years gaining control over richter and summoning the castle.

I think the fact that they mention 4 years at all confuses people. I have seen the 5 year gap mistaken for only 4 all over the place so much so that I thought it was 4 myself having simply never payed close enough attention to the years to know otherwise.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: Claimh Solais on December 12, 2013, 07:48:04 PM

Quote from: VladCT on December 11, 2013, 09:45:34 PM

Is that a typo I see?

Whoops. Will fix.

Quote from: X on December 12, 2013, 10:38:11 AM

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI :)

Yes, it seems I was confused, since in the intro it spoke of four years later. I forgot about the actual five year gap between the events of the stories.

Quote from: Corpsecrank on December 11, 2013, 09:24:00 PM

Nice! I wonder if there is a way to get the first post fixed from someone who could modify it without a limit. Could also copy it all into a txt file for download or something and add that the first post.

Not too big a problem, since I included a link to the second post in the topic post. A text file doesn't sound too outta the question, though.

Title: Re: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)
Post by: X on December 12, 2013, 08:03:52 PM

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I think the fact that they mention 4 years at all confuses people. I have seen the 5 year gap mistaken for only 4 all over the place so much so that I thought it was 4 myself having simply never payed close enough attention to the years to know otherwise.

Yeah this lead to a lot of confusion although I was probably one of the very few that knew that actual dates just by reading the instruction manual as the years of both games are in there.

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