Topic: SotN Rewrite (COMPLETE!)

[Corpsecrank]

Yeah I think you have the right idea anyhow. I mean trying to make the dialogue periodically correct is impossible in some ways. However a reference to it by maybe using bits and pieces to give a more authentic feeling could work quite well. Leaving out words used only in very modern forms of english where possible could help this as well.

I like the idea you are working on here. I may have always pictured the sotn dialogue as something that should be periodically correct to a degree but the other big thing I always had in my mind after playing was the lack of dialogue in general in the game. Expanding upon the dialogue really does add so much more depth to the plot even if no new details are actually added. Interesting stuff to say the least really.

[Claimh Solais]

Thank you very much sir. Maybe soon I'll find some inspiration to finish this already. I've been too buried in my work on my original stories.

[Claimh Solais]

Updated. Added two more scenes. Gonna work on the battle against Richter and the inverted castle stuff tomorrow.

[X]

Great job! Did you restore the Succubus' raunchy lines? After all she is a succubus and they are sexually driven no-matter the situation.

[Corpsecrank]

Listen to this guy hes fapping to text now

[Claimh Solais]

Great job! Did you restore the Succubus' raunchy lines? After all she is a succubus and they are sexually driven no-matter the situation.

Yes, I re-added the DXC line. As for the rest of the script, I kept it the way it was. I decided to not include the fight between Alucard and Maria since... it doesn't really make sense.

[Claimh Solais]

And with that, I am pretty much finished with this rewrite! Unfortunately, due to a max character count on posts, I cannot include the last few scenes in the first post, so they'll be right here!

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(Dropping into the room in a crouch, Alucard slowly lifts his head to see the specter of Shaft, standing there, facing toward the altar. As Alucard rises to his feet, Shaft claps his hands)

Shaft
All hail the son of our Master!
Stronger than the mightiest hunter!

Alucard
Shaft, wasn't it?
So you were the one controlling Belmont.

(Shaft slowly turns around to face Alucard)

Shaft
Yes. I am the one who brought about the resurrection of your father five years ago.
That was, until Belmont and his doll came forth and ruined my plans...
But all has not yet been lost.
This world must be cleansed in a forge of Chaos.

Alucard
Loyal to a fault, it seems.
Tell me, why did you make Belmont the lord of the castle?

Shaft
(chuckles
Is it not obvious?
For many centuries, Castle Dracula has been a battleground.
Light and darkness have confronted in a deathmatch here, and never to cease.
But the so-called "light" the vampire hunters wield... it always prevails.
So what better way to rid myself of a pesky problem... than to have them fight each other?

Alucard
And you would have the strongest among them eliminate the rest.
Belmont.

Shaft
Exactly.
And by possessing him, and turning him into the castle's master...
He was no longer a threat.
The whole conflict between the fool and those vermin was merely a stall.

Alucard
But your plan has a fatal flaw.
You never counted for me.
And now, it has failed.

Shaft
(laughs)
Oh? Has it indeed?
Foolish child. Your soul is just as frail as his was.
You will become my puppet. You will take his place!
I will tear that weak human spirit apart!

(The two fight, but Alucard prevails. The orb protecting Shaft shatters, and he crumples to the ground with a cry of pain. Face down on the ground, slowly, he begins crawling toward the altar)

Shaft
N... no...

Alucard
Your beloved darkness awaits you.
Dwell there for all eternity.

(Shaft chuckles weakly. He then laughs madly, continuing to crawl toward the altar)

Shaft
I have... fulfilled my role...
The Master has come... he will purify this corrupt world...
Let him purge this world... in flames...

(Shaft reaches out toward the large symbol on the wall, before dropping, his hand falling upon the steps to the altar. Just as he does so, the room begins to shake, and the eye on the symbol opens. Darkness begins to fill the room, until Alucard is lost within the blackness)

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(Alucard stands alone in the darkness, his sword drawn. He looks down, his eyes shut. He opens them, and looks forward.)

Alucard
Father.

(The figure of Count Dracula slowly fades into view, until the two stand facing each other. Dracula smiles at his son)

Count Dracula
Well met, my son.
It has been far too long.

Alucard
Not long enough for my liking.
Father, you know this as well as I do.
I cannot allow you to leave this place alive.

Count Dracula
So you have not changed...
Your heart still lingers with those disgusting creatures!
Why, my son? Why can you not see?
Those arrogant weaklings are the corruption of the world!
Tell me, have you forgotten what they have done to your mother?!

Alucard
No! I could never forget!
But they are just like you and I, Father.
They are afraid, afraid of that which is not within their control.
And if there is one thing that I have learned those centuries ago...
If there is one thing that I have learned here, today, in this castle,
it's that there is good in mankind.
And it is this reason why I bear no ill will toward them.

Count Dracula
You are pathetic.
It seems they have corrupted you, with their sentiments...
No matter. I shall make you see the error of your ways.
I, myself, will cast aside your weak human half...
and you will join me, in remaking this world!

(Dracula fades into the blackness, and electricity sparks in the dark, and soon engulfs the room in light, where Alucard prepares to face Dracula. He points his sword forward at his father, who has emerged from the darkness as a terrible beast)

Alucard
You will never touch this world again...
In Mother's name, I swear it!

(And with that, the final battle begins)

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(Alucard runs toward Dracula and drives his sword through Dracula's heart. Dracula screams out in pain)

Alucard
Go back whence you came!
Trouble the soul of my Mother no more!

(Alucard pulls the sword away, and Dracula falls to his knees, blood spilling from his wound. He grips his chest, defeated. He breathes heavily, in agony)

Count Dracula
Impossible... how...
How can this be...
How is it that I have been so defeated..?

(Alucard sheathes his sword, and kneels down before his father)

Alucard
You lost your heart, your soul.
You became blinded with vengeance, and that was your undoing.

(Dracula weakly chuckles at his son. He looks at him, with a weak smile on his face)

Count Dracula
How poetic...
So... I tragically sacrificed all I held dear... in this mad quest for power...
"For what profit is it to a man if he gains the whole world...
but loses his own soul..."
Matthew 16:26...

Alucard
Father... even after all of this...
I know that Mother will find it in her heart to forgive you.

Count Dracula
Forgive me..? No... I understand now.

(Dracula drops his head)

Leon... it has taken me so long, but I finally understand...
This is not the path I should have taken...

(Dracula once more looks at Alucard)

My son... please, tell me...
What... what were Lisa's last words?

Alucard
...She said, "Do not hate humans.
And if you cannot live with them, then at least do them no harm.
For their's is already a hard lot."
And... she also said that she would love you.
For eternity.

Count Dracula
I see...

(Dracula looks toward the sky)

Lisa...
I can never atone for what I have done...
I... I am sorry...

(Dracula faces Alucard once more, and with a warm smile on his face)

My son... Adrian...
It is good to look upon your face again.
...Farewell.

(Slowly, Dracula fades away. Alucard slowly climbs to his feet as he watches the final embers of his father fade into obscurity. Slowly, a tear falls from his eye onto the ground as he speaks his final words to his father)

Alucard
...Farewell, Father.
Believe it or not... I will miss you.

(Alucard fades away into the blackness as well. Slowly, the castle in the sky vanishes, and we see on a cliffside Richter and Maria, as they watch Castle Dracula once more crumble to the ground. The sun shines upon its remains. They hear footsteps behind them, and turn around to find Alucard standing there)

Alucard
So you made it.

Maria Renard
Alucard!
I'm so glad you're all right!

Richter Belmont
It's over, huh...
Forgive me. It's my fault you had to fight your own father.
If only I were not so weak, none of this would have happened.

Alucard
Worry not.
I had my own reasons for facing him.
You are not to blame.

Richter Belmont
Even so, it couldn't have been easy.

Alucard
Indeed it wasn't... but it had to be done.
There was no avoiding it.
And remember, the only thing necessary for evil to triumph is for good men to do nothing.

Richter Belmont
I understand.

(The three of them stand together, looking upon the ruins of Castle Dracula.)

Maria Renard
It's over... things can finally go back to normal.
Alucard, where will you go from here?

Alucard
...The blood that flows in my veins is cursed.
It holds naught but ill fortune for this world.
I suppose it would be best for this world if I were to once again disappear.

Maria Renard
Disappear..? B-but...

(Alucard looks on toward the ruins of the castle. He still once more feels remorse)

Alucard
...I must bid farewell to my homeland once more, never to look upon its beauty again...
And to you two, as well.
Take care of yourselves.
I'm afraid we will not meet again.

(Alucard turns away from them, and begins walking away. Maria steps forward, wanting to say something, but nothing meaningful comes out)

Maria Renard
(quietly)
...Alucard...

(Richter stands beside her and places a hand on her shoulder)

Richter Belmont
What are you waiting for?
I know you want to go after him.

(Maria looks to Alucard leaving, then to Richter)

Maria Renard
I... I'm sorry.
But... I just can't let him vanish like this.
I have to at least try and talk to him...

Richter Belmont
Then don't waste any more time, Maria.
Hurry after him.
If there's anyone who can ease his pain, it's you.

Maria Renard
(nods)
Thank you, Richter.
Farewell.

Richter Belmont
And yourself, Maria.

(Maria turns away and begins running after Alucard, and slowly the screen fades, and the credits begin to roll)

~The End~

[Corpsecrank]

Nice! I wonder if there is a way to get the first post fixed from someone who could modify it without a limit. Could also copy it all into a txt file for download or something and add that the first post.

[VladCT]

So what better way to rid myself of a pesky problem... then to have them fight each other?

Is that a typo I see?

[X]

Yes. I am the one who brought about the resurrection of your father four years ago.
That was, until Belmont and his doll came forth and ruined my plans...
But all has not yet been lost.
This world must be cleansed in a forge of Chaos.

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI 

[Corpsecrank]

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI 

Damn you now I have to go look this up because I could have sworn I read or heard right in the official material it was 4 years. If I am right does that mean they made a mistake in the official material? Hmmm time to go find out.

Found it:

Shaft would continue to exist as a spirit contained within a crystal ball. However, in the five years since the previous battle, Shaft manages to regain power through the curse placed on Richter. After four years, Shaft succeeds in gaining full control over Richter. He plans to revive Dracula with the aid of Richter's powers. Maria sets out to find the missing Richter only to stumble on Dracula's castle which had risen out of the mist. Sensing the rise of evil, Alucard awakes from a 300 year slumber. Thanks to Alucard, Richter is freed from Shaft's influence.  Unable to influence Richter further but with enough power to act on his own, Shaft summons Dracula's true castle as an inverted floating version in the sky above the current castle.

That doesn't sound very clear when you first read it but I believe what this means is that yes it is 5 years later but during the 4th year richter had fallen under complete control. So shaft spent the last 5 years gaining control over richter and summoning the castle.

I think the fact that they mention 4 years at all confuses people. I have seen the 5 year gap mistaken for only 4 all over the place so much so that I thought it was 4 myself having simply never payed close enough attention to the years to know otherwise.

[Claimh Solais]

Is that a typo I see?

Whoops. Will fix.

Correction. Shaft brought about Dracula's resurrection five years ago, not four.

Rondo - 1792

SotN - 1797

Just FYI 

Yes, it seems I was confused, since in the intro it spoke of four years later. I forgot about the actual five year gap between the events of the stories.

Nice! I wonder if there is a way to get the first post fixed from someone who could modify it without a limit. Could also copy it all into a txt file for download or something and add that the first post.

Not too big a problem, since I included a link to the second post in the topic post. A text file doesn't sound too outta the question, though.

[X]

I think the fact that they mention 4 years at all confuses people. I have seen the 5 year gap mistaken for only 4 all over the place so much so that I thought it was 4 myself having simply never payed close enough attention to the years to know otherwise.

Yeah this lead to a lot of confusion although I was probably one of the very few that knew that actual dates just by reading the instruction manual as the years of both games are in there.